This morning during reading we have had to write a story starter refering to the story named ghostly shadow on Pobble 365.
The Ghostly Shadow
One Minute you saw it next minute you didn’t the ghost like shadow had disappeared behind the dark, dense fog. His curiosity got the better of him, so he wanted to turn and chase
The fog seemed to be following me, It danced amongst the trees: Slithered, Sneaked in and out of the branches. The trees lining the road, sentinels of the night, seemed to sway in the breeze, their branches reaching up like tentacles clawing for the sky, yearning to escape the cloying fog.
One second you saw it the next you didn’t. The ghostly shadow vanished once again.
He had come to far to turn back now. Goosebumps shivered on his cold, clammy skin, and he was sure he could hear his heart pounding back and forth in his chest, like muhammed ali punching a boxing bag. Pulling his scarf tightly around himself, he stepped forward into the woods, towards the place the shadow had been...
Kia ora ritchie
ReplyDeleteI like this post because of how descriptive it is and because you used some words that most people don't use.
how long did this take?
Thanks for the comment kayne,
DeleteMost of the words I used I had to think about for a long time to make them very descriptive.
This took me about 20 minutes to make.
From Ritchie
Kia Ora Ritchie,
ReplyDeletethis is a really interesting blog post because of how many descriptive and detailed words you put into this blog post. What was your favourite thing about this blog post? Maybe next time you could decrease the size of the words so it doesn't go out of the blog post. Have a good day.
-Jason
Thanks for the comment Jason,
DeleteThank you for the positive and helpful feedback for my writing,
My favorite part of this story was writing it in a different type of story-line then others.
What was your favorite part of the story?
From Ritchie
Kia Ora Ritchie, This blog post is amazing because of all the amazing descriptive language that you used.
ReplyDeleteMaybe next time you could decrease the size to make it easier to read other than that you have done a amazing job I require you to keep on going and if you do then I will give you a treat :)
Hi Ritchie,
ReplyDeleteThis is a good blog post because you used a ton of descriptive language in you writing. I also like how you made short sentences for us to read. Maybe next time you could decrease the size because I missed a bit of your writing due to this but this is a good blog post.
Kind Regards-Riley
Thanks for the comment Riley,
DeleteThank you for your feedback and positive comment.
I will be sure to reduse the size of the text next time.
What is your favorite part of my writing?
From: Ritchie
Hello Ritchie,
ReplyDeleteGreat story. I like the title and what the story is based on. I love ghost story's, and I like the words "The fog, danced around the trees" Why did you make this story and would you make another?
Keep up the good work!
Thanks for the comment Oliver.
DeleteThanks for the feedback and positive comment.
I will make a other story in the future.
I also love ghost stories.
From Ritchie